well. i completely forgot about the energon tower stuff. i can;t just leave that out. it'd mess up the storyline waaaay too much. so here's a brief addition. a prequel, if you will. of how they went about making these towers

 

Dr. Jones: Optimus. i have a great idea for defense!

Optimus: are we going to teach the omnicons karate? ooh ooh! i know. we get our custom motorcycles! we always get cycles after we get the megazord!

Dr. jones: er. no. it's called an "energon tower". i just finished it. and now we plan on planting it on ocean city

Optimus: well. as long as lord zedd cant get in. i give you clearance to do this. go for it.

Dr. Jones: ok, guys. put it in

*a series of omnicons drop the tower into place.*

Hot Shot: SIR, WE HAVE TERRORCONS INVADING!

Dr. Jones: perfect! now i can test this bad boy out! *pushes the big red button on his remote control*

*the energon tower begins to glow. suddenly a song plays out from the many speakers on the tower*

speakers: THIS! LOVE! HAS! TAKEN ITS TOLL ON ME!

SHE SAID GOODBYE! TOO MANY TIMES BEFORE!

*the terrorcons scream and explode*

Ironhide: whoa. what just happened?

Dr. Jones: that was the awesome power of the energon tower! it plays maroon five songs at a frequency only terrorcons can hear.

Jetfire: amazing. if we heard that stuff, we'd blow up too.

Dr. Jones: exactly. nothing can withstand the horror of the maroon five!

Hahaha... More!

I always wondered what the deal with the energon towers REALLY was..

Anyway, it's brilliant, keep it up :clap

i know i know. my secondary writer (my brother) is being lazy and wont help me. he thought up Wedge's quirks and is the mastermind behind all his lines.

anyone who thought i forgot about this fic is wrong. i'm still waiting for my brother to help me write the chapter. but i have made a christmas carol parody about everyone's favorite 4-headed weirdo:

 

sang to the tune of "here come's santa claue"

 

Here comes Alpha-Q

Here comes Alpha-Q

Down from Unicron’s head

He dislikes negotiations

He’ll just fight instead

 

He just wants some energon to bring his planet back

Maybe some new terrorcons and a really heavy snack

 

Here comes Alpha-Q

Here comes Alpha-Q

Down from Unicron’s head

Day or night it doesn’t matter

He has infrared

 

Alpha-Q’s the last survivor of the Quintessons

Flying far through outer space to escape from Megatron

 

ooooo!! The instrumental solo! Oh let’s go get a lunch break! no. We must wait DOH! BUT I’M DYING OVER HERE! I MUST HAVE FOOD! OH YOU WONT BE DYING UNTIL AFTER I GET THROUGH WITH YOU! quiet. The solos’ almost over tell that to HIM!

 

You might see this turquoise creature headed for your town

Give him lots of meat and bread and he’ll put his weapons down

 

Here comes Alpha-Q

Here comes Alpha-Q

Down from Unicron’s head

If you lack the food he wants

You’ll wish that you were dead

 

If he can’t have food to eat he’ll tear apart the room

You may want to leave the house or be crushed down to your doom

optimus: IT's morphin time!!!

 

 

classic man!!! keep it up!

:wtf :wtf

 

All writers want feedback, negative OR positive, because it helps them to improve. First, I want to tell you that I admire you for coming up with an idea and sticking to it. Second, I realize many people have a differing sense of humor from other people. Some things seem funny to some, not to others.

 

What I see in your writing is low effort. You're capable of more, but for whatever reason, you're giving it a halfassed attempt. Even some of you who are laughing at this know the low amount of effort involved.

 

Your jokes are cliche', your writing low-key at best. You're capable of more, and I hope you bring it out. Right now, it's not witty, funny, or even slightly entertaining. It's boring, BUT, with a little renovation, you can make it funny. A couple of tips:

 

1. Optimus should stop acting like a Power Ranger. Perhaps making him act in some way contrary to how he usually acts would be funnier.

 

2. Why does one of Alpha Q's heads constantly want to eat? Where's your basis for this? It doesn't make sense. The best type of humor is the kind of humor that makes sense, that we can relate to. But having a character ravenous for food, bots, and whatever else he sees, when his original character wasn't that way at all. . . . it just doesn't ring true.

 

3. Try your hand at topical humor. Making fun of how things are by exaggerating existing events, situations, or political tensions draws people in more tightly. Again, this is part of that "relating to the character" thing I was talking about. People get frustrated with things, but they never let themselves explode over it. Watching someone such as Inferno dealing with red tape at the Post Office, and going berserk over it, is much more funny than seeing Optimus Prime say "It's Morphin Time" rather than "Super Mode!" Especially since, in that case, it's essentially the same thing.

feh! it aint MY fault you can't appreciate good humor. look at the amount of views compared to the other fics. i currently hold a record for the most views on a single fic. THAT tells you something. I dont need people syaing my fic sucks or that it's boring. if you must critisize it, simply imply that you just plain dont like it. now let me tell YOU something. the best kind of humor is the pointless and utterly stupid kind. take Wedge for example. his lack of intelligence is hilarious. i laugh as i type his quotes. now then. allow me to respond to your tips:

 

1. Optimus's powerlinx mode is a Megazord. A MEGAZORD! those robots used in power rangers. you cant help but make that his quirk when you realize this. but who knows? i might change it when Wing Saber comes along and Prime's road crew vehicle friends (AKA the four other Zords) are destroyed in a funny sort of manner.

 

2. pointlessness is FUNNY! i dont need anything to base jokes off of as long as they make people laugh! Alpha-Q is one of the most popular characters in this fic. the white face has a very annoying voice and poofy cheeks. as if he has his mouth full constantly. when you hear his voice and then picture him whining over the lack of food, you can't help but laugh.

 

3. no....i don't. my style of humor is meaningless characters and dumbass quotes. again, like Wedge always says. topical humor is a different category i dont need to use. Inferno wont be going to the post office ever. he guards ocean city and obsesses over napkins. why he does it, i dont know. but it doesnt matter. IT'S JUST PLAIN FUNNY! Optimus doesnt say "its morphin' time" instead of "super mode", he says that before he goes into battle. when he activates super mode, he says "WE NEED ENERGON MEGAZORD!"

 

anyhoo, to wrap this response up, i'd like to say that my humor works. people like it, and i'm not going to change it because of a complaint from a single individual. I'm sorry if you don't like my fic. But if you simply can't find anything funny in it, then don't read it!

But if you simply can't find anything funny in it, then don't read it!

That won't be a problem, trust me on that.

:wtf :wtf

 

All writers want feedback, negative OR positive, because it helps them to improve. First, I want to tell you that I admire you for coming up with an idea and sticking to it. Second, I realize many people have a differing sense of humor from other people. Some things seem funny to some, not to others.

 

What I see in your writing is low effort. You're capable of more, but for whatever reason, you're giving it a halfassed attempt. Even some of you who are laughing at this know the low amount of effort involved.

 

Your jokes are cliche', your writing low-key at best. You're capable of more, and I hope you bring it out. Right now, it's not witty, funny, or even slightly entertaining. It's boring, BUT, with a little renovation, you can make it funny. A couple of tips:

 

1. Optimus should stop acting like a Power Ranger. Perhaps making him act in some way contrary to how he usually acts would be funnier.

 

2. Why does one of Alpha Q's heads constantly want to eat? Where's your basis for this? It doesn't make sense. The best type of humor is the kind of humor that makes sense, that we can relate to. But having a character ravenous for food, bots, and whatever else he sees, when his original character wasn't that way at all. . . . it just doesn't ring true.

 

3. Try your hand at topical humor. Making fun of how things are by exaggerating existing events, situations, or political tensions draws people in more tightly. Again, this is part of that "relating to the character" thing I was talking about. People get frustrated with things, but they never let themselves explode over it. Watching someone such as Inferno dealing with red tape at the Post Office, and going berserk over it, is much more funny than seeing Optimus Prime say "It's Morphin Time" rather than "Super Mode!" Especially since, in that case, it's essentially the same thing.

you're a big fat smurfing bastard,bootleg megatron's tf humor is the best,and if you don't like the humor,then don't read it instead of typing smurfin' lies

and once again you're a smurfin' big fat smurfin' bastard