Well, since you're asking for mean... I'm happy to oblidge. :P

 

Wouldn't hurt to smooth out her face... a lot. Look at some screen caps from the show and then come back to look the toy. Show the lines in her face without making her look like skeletor or rather the female terminator sans flesh. They're detail carvings, not bumps or ridges that alter the angle/overall shape of the face.

 

You've got a great concept of the body in general, but you make her look far too thin and fragile in the arms, you need to pump up the bust just a bit (she's not stacked, but come on... even the toy's got a bigger rack than that!), thin out the lines under her boobs that go around to her sides, thin the waist... a lot (it's how she looks!) and smooth her out some more. The aesthetic on BA is that she's mostly smooth while not generally chunky, she's not the anorexic you've got depicted; what you've got there is brittle and rough. She's supposed to appear smooth and supple, yet with freakish proportions that you... well, it's like you did them backwards or something.

 

You've got a hell of an eye for detail, but it wouldn't hurt to give the show model a gander and take that into account with your interpretation of the figure. What you appear to be trying to convey is an honest depiction of the toy (though, mine doesn't have those creepy ass eyes... :wtf ), but with definite changes in the proportions that don't have any real rhyme or reason. :tfhuh

If you're going to be direct from the figure, pump up the feet! Note the detail along long her middle claw and keep the arms in their proper, freakish proportion. Her butt kibble could also be pumped up. Don't be afraid that you're going too far, be generous with the proportions and keep her smooth. You captured SO FREAKIN' MUCH DETAIL right off the toy, why not keep going right off the toy? I'd really like to see what you could do from that.

 

I eagerly look forward to seeing more of your works. :thumb

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That isn't mean, it's honest. 

On taking a closer look at the toy, you're right on several aspects.  The feet should be longer (not too sure about the arms needing to be, though...although if I lengthened both the arms and the legs it would probably look better).  The detail lines on the face should probably be thinner and not so defined, and the details on the middle claws could stand to be more accurate, I'll take a look at the show's version and see how they did it to get an idea of what's considered normal for her character.  And yeah, I could have made the butt kibble a little more pronounced.  (saying that makes me giggle...butt kibble).  As far as the breasts go, when looking more closely at the toy, they probably don't need to be bigger, but should probably be closer together to giver her a more busty look, kind of like a wonderbra.  As far as the eyes go, I was going off Crystal Widow for the paint scheme and, at least on mine, she does have the red-eyes :thumb

Anyways, thanks for the input. 

As I said, honest critiquing helps me with the next picture and your comments definitely give me some things to take into consideration.  Thanks again.

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Heh... "butt kibble" :rofl

 

Glad to hear you didn't take it the wrong way. I'd rather be honest about it even at the risk of hurting someone's feelings because you can't get any better if you don't know where you're going wrong. :thumb

You're right, Blackarachnia does NOT have a gynormous rack, but on the other hand those lines across her breasts could be less pronounced. Wonderbra sounds about right. :thumb

What I meant was that she's got that slitted eye thang going on. Like a snake. It freaks me out, personally. :P However, it's up to you how you want it to look, regardless. All I can do is wish you the best of luck... and give you some comparative links :yay

 

Have a lookie here

http://www.bwtf.com/bm/toys/reviews/blackarachnia/

http://www.bwtf.com/universe/blackarachnia/

http://www.bwtf.com/universe/cwvsos/

:thumb :thumb  Fantastic job!

 

When I first opened this, I wasn't expecting much when I first opened it, but I was blown away!

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Considering where most of my posts are, I would have been expecting a trap. :redface

*considers changing subtitle to 'it isn't a trap...really'*

Thanks for the compliment.

 

 

WOooooow...

But...but...there's something wrong with her feet.... :D

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Thanks...I think :D

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What I mean is, make her feet pointy(like in the show). Looks cooler, since you can't  do it with the toy.

Heh... "butt kibble" :rofl

 

Glad to hear you didn't take it the wrong way. I'd rather be honest about it even at the risk of hurting someone's feelings because you can't get any better if you don't know where you're going wrong. :thumb

You're right, Blackarachnia does NOT have a gynormous rack, but on the other hand those lines across her breasts could be less pronounced. Wonderbra sounds about right. :thumb

What I meant was that she's got that slitted eye thang going on. Like a snake. It freaks me out, personally. :P However, it's up to you how you want it to look, regardless. All I can do is wish you the best of luck... and give you some comparative links :yay

 

Have a lookie here

http://www.bwtf.com/bm/toys/reviews/blackarachnia/

http://www.bwtf.com/universe/blackarachnia/

http://www.bwtf.com/universe/cwvsos/

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Awesome, thanks for the links.

 

What I mean is, make her feet pointy(like in the show). Looks cooler, since you can't  do it with the toy.

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Gotcha.

 

 

 

 

Well, thanks to everyone again for the input.  Hopefully by the end of this week I should have one or two more pics up.  (takes me a while since I spend all my non-freetime drawing non-transformers...  Kinda makes spending my freetime drawing anything a non-priority...but hey :thumb ) 

Cool :thumb Looking forward to more art from you... and especially more Robo Force stuff :P

BM BA certainly posses well.. thats why I like her so much. Pretty good picture my man. I've used BA as a model before... probably not as good though. :thumb

It's only the line art, no shadowing or color yet (but that's next on my 'to do' list so a finnished product will be up in the next day or two)  but here's

 

Universe Whirl

 

 

 

 

Once again any comments, good or bad, are much appreciated.

Thanks

 

EDIT: I already know I need to fix the end of the gun and add another bar on the right upper arm (the one with the propeller).  But that'll all be fixed in the final copy. :thumb

t3h coolness! :clap  :thumb

Nice! :thumb You always pack so much detail in your drawings.

Thank you both.

 

I went ahead and fixed all of the errors I could find in the line art (some f'd up perspective lines and the earlier mentioned problems) and did a cleaner inking job on it.  I'm going to start coloring on it shortly, so hopefully it will be up tomarrow.  In the meantime, here's the redo on the Whirl line art.

 

Looks really good. i have no opinion on BA though. never a fan of female TF's.